sniffing like a bunny

 

My 12-year-old niece wrote:  “the sound of a baby sniffing like a bunny in a garden full of its favorite vegetables.”

Her English teacher crossed it out and “babies crying, people laughing and music playing overhead” was what was read to me as a guest in her classroom on “Grand People Day.”

After the formal reading she told me how much she loved her original metaphor and peeled back a page to show me her handwritten first draft where the baby was sniffing like a bunny and popcorn smelled like it wanted to fly.

She beamed right past the teacher’s red pen on the page.  I want to be more like her!

Author: Julie Ann Stevens

My art flows from the patterns & paths of my lived experience which ⏤ like yours ⏤ are at once deeply personal and entirely universal.

One thought

  1. I know!!!!! It was totally not fair!!!! She changed everybody’s story. After the bunny part i put ah it’s so relaxing and she said that’s not relaxing and ossed it out instead of moving the relaxing part to somewhere else in the CREATIVE writing project!

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